Cita:
|
Originalmente Escrito por rose [center:e814b69f5a]Criying like yesterday
I start criying again,
like yesterday,
when you go away.
I feel so lonely
and I didn't find the way,
to tell you,
please come back again.
The nights are so cold,
the day's so dark,
I can't even breath,
I can't even laugh.
I forget how to smile,
how to love,
how to forgive you.
You breake my heart,
and let me alone,
and now I am like yesterday,
criying because you go away.[/center:e814b69f5a] |
Rose:
It's a beautiful poem, with a lot of feeling within.
Maybe you can edit a few of words in it so it has a better effect on your reader:
Crying - break - and "leave" instead of "let".
I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.
DEJAVU