Criying like yesterday

rose · 21-feb-2006, 10:29

[center:e7ff48577d]Criying like yesterday

I start criying again,
like yesterday,
when you go away.

I feel so lonely
and I didn't find the way,
to tell you,
please come back again.

The nights are so cold,
the day's so dark,
I can't even breath,
I can't even laugh.

I forget how to smile,
how to love,
how to forgive you.

You breake my heart,
and let me alone,
and now I am like yesterday,
criying because you go away.[/center:e7ff48577d]

poroeta · 22-feb-2006, 04:37

uff..1

poroeta · 22-feb-2006, 04:39

Ufff, how are you going to miss him if he's always around? :D , maybe a little going away is not as bad as it seems... your crying and loneliness is not good tho. I enjoyed it, sounds simple, nice and sweet... and sad, a pleasure reading.

rose · 22-feb-2006, 09:29

Thank You,
it makes me happy that
you came to read me.

:wink: Rose

DEJAVU · 06-mar-2006, 10:08

Cita:

Originalmente Escrito por rose

[center:e814b69f5a]Criying like yesterday

I start criying again,
like yesterday,
when you go away.

I feel so lonely
and I didn't find the way,
to tell you,
please come back again.

The nights are so cold,
the day's so dark,
I can't even breath,
I can't even laugh.

I forget how to smile,
how to love,
how to forgive you.

You breake my heart,
and let me alone,
and now I am like yesterday,
criying because you go away.[/center:e814b69f5a]

Rose:

It's a beautiful poem, with a lot of feeling within.
Maybe you can edit a few of words in it so it has a better effect on your reader:
Crying - break - and "leave" instead of "let".
I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.

DEJAVU

rose · 09-mar-2006, 10:47

Hii!!
Thanks for reading me,
and for give me that few words,
I will changed tomorrow,its a little bit
late.

Take care,Rose