Tema: The shining of your eyes

let-s say ...Is a good try...
nice words. though You need to put a little more passion on them. makebelieve.

peace.

por amormejia

Excellent poem!!! The ending is just great. It's been great to stop and read your art. Congratulations.

Hey thank you for your post and your support, see you later

por Yo_Pecador

let-s say ...Is a good try...
nice words. though You need to put a little more passion on them. makebelieve.

peace.

thank you a lot for your post also, I'll try to improve as well. This one its within my first english poems, I wrote it for a beautiful girl whom push me back to life... just with her eyes. It's just a poem from a nice feeling, now the challenge is on myself.

See you around

por Axelious

Oh! The way it wasn't dark,
or maybe just a little...
No need to be afraid
half dark, half clear.


Pleasing way it was but...
Once I met the shining of your eyes,
those wonderful and deep eyes

make the half dark disappear...
or maybe make the half clear brighten up


Ah! The way is so clear now
almost brightening because the shining of your eyes
incredible feeling, strong enough to jump over the world,
I can imagine how it's back to half dark, half clear,
rather prefer the shining or your eyes !


Let me bring to you as a present
a few words of love,
innocent and young.
I wrote it
but are entirely yours.

Axelious,
I liked your poem. Your words just have come up easily as you look at the eyes of your girl. That´s the way things happen when one falls in love.
Continue writing in English. A good poet is about to come.
Fraternally,
Ramiro

por ramiropad

Axelious,
I liked your poem. Your words just have come up easily as you look at the eyes of your girl. That´s the way things happen when one falls in love.
Continue writing in English. A good poet is about to come.
Fraternally,
Ramiro

Hey Ramiro,

thank you a lot for your encouragement, I'm sure we'll have more of my poems around.... english version he he he. you know? sometimes writing these days has became kind of dreaming... not because writing itself.. but the feeling is gaining strength each day...

por lluviadeabril

When clarity escapes us -perhaps it's time to see eye to eye -the clearest view without regard to where anyone may stand at any given point.

Great poem -I must acknowledge the end.

Dear lluvia,

Is my pleasure have you around. And you got the point in a perfect way "the clearest view without regard to where anyone may stand at any given point". That point of view is God's love, the pleasant and greatest that's a fact and about that girl... heheh "little girl" helped me lots with her love and support she's a great person and she is the one who inspires me to wrote it..... no more details. I love her very much!!

About the end is quite similar to kind of song, I realized about that before but just like that is what I mean. See you.