Alongside

**nonickmario** · 25/05/2010, 23:20

to sleep, forever to sleep
to feel the chance
to grab a new dream

to wake up in anger
empty of an unchanged reality
best is to sleep

To face thee, to caress thee, to trust thee
I trust thee.

Here, dream alongside

RA · 28/05/2010, 12:18

por nonickmario

to sleep, forever to sleep
to feel the chance
to grab a new dream

to wake up in anger
empty of an unchanged reality
best is to sleep

To face thee, to caress thee, to trust thee
I trust thee.

Here, dream alongside

Nonickmario,
You've written a nice poem, it only needs music to be a song. It calls my attention to see in it the word "thee", although you used it correctly. I know "thee" is an old word for `you' used only when addressing one person, especially God (usually Thee), as the object of a verb. It is used in the nominative as well as the objective case especially by members of the Society of Friends. Some people could think that your poem is an elegy to death, that you prefer not to wake up and continuing dreaming alongside God.
Whatsoever it meaning is, it's a beautiful poem. Congratulations.
Fraternally,
Ramiro

**nonickmario** · 07/06/2010, 23:56

Thank you SO much :-)

**lluviadeabril** · 10/06/2010, 12:16

Interesting poem nonickmario,
delineating a choice between living a dream or dying from anger,
a cry and invitation to someone you trust and hope will hear.

I was impressed by the hint of simplicity in your lines, but given ramiro's extensive interpretation -it's obvious that much escapes me.

A huge hug.