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Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by lluviadeabril, Mar 7, 2012. Replies: 6 | Views: 724

  1. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    To be so close
    your breath feeding my breath
    -flesh-
    veins running through veins
    -sustenance-
    the chest shelters you near
    to touch an image in my head, just one more step
    -stillness-
    the chill that settles in, trying to think in an interrupted place
    -let go, wait…
    I want to hear beyond your thoughts
    the right and wrong –what is it, do you know?
    - your eyes-
    beyond the second that splits veins at every stare
    just one of yours
    and a pitiful attempt to disobey

    -the flesh, and thought and veins-

    I cannot and I fall
    every time

    disgracefully close

    -asking for more-

     
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  2. Roman Vieira

    Roman Vieira El cuervo rojo que te observa en silencio.

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    Wow, I'm having a hard tme trying to say something understandable about this one... i'll try my best, lets see:

    It is very tranquil but yet there is the passion... something very well writen, and thos parts like -Flesh, ustenance, and etc- give it a much more imaginable space on my mind also making it stronger and enjoyable at it's best... (holy god, it's happening again today... pleasant, very pleasant -.-'). As i was saying, i find this fascinating, i mean, i can take it as something phisical or rather something mental... as if you were barely wantig to make love to thought or an idea... -.- is it normal that i would like to beliee it's the second way? yeah, better stop now.

    This one goes to my favorites from now on... and by the way, can i ask you for more and fall disgracefully close? -.-

    None stop kisses.
     
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  3. Alberto Amaris

    Alberto Amaris Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    Beautiful poetical statement friend, a captivation to read yourself, my regards
     
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  4. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    Ha! Ha! -I am so glad you liked it. No response from me. Remember -it's all in the interpretation. Your dissertation lends so much to these otherwise simple lines -I will not spoil that with an explanation - by the way the rhyme was unintentional. Like so many other things I do.:)


    Hugs, hugs and more hugs.
     
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  5. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    Your eyes Alberto, the best statement one can hope to capture. I am really very fortunate to have your thoughts on this simple attempt to write.

    A huge hug.
     
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  6. Guadalupe Cisneros-Villa

    Guadalupe Cisneros-Villa Dallas, Texas y Monterrey NL México

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    Ah a wonderful surprise to read you in this form.
    You know I can relate to every word.

    BEAUTIFUL!

    From Dallas Texas hugs and kisses.
     
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  7. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    What an honor to have your presence, your thoughts -a most sincere and heartfelt, thank you.

    Dallas, Texas -an amazing place. Reciprocal hugs and kisses.;)
     
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