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Inkless Poem

Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by lluviadeabril, Oct 14, 2009. Replies: 8 | Views: 920

  1. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    An impeccable poem, inkless, without erasures,
    written in fixed glances, in agreement, a matchless pact.

    Each verse, a touch, a breath, a gaze.
    The end, a kiss --perpetual desire to return to the notebook..

    Suddenly, a storm. Ink runs intense red.

    A notebook's end, my heart bled dry.

    Exhausted--I succumb.




    © scg, todos los derechos reservados.
     
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  2. cesarfco.cd

    cesarfco.cd Corrector Corrector/a

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    Poetry in motion, he does not expect to be born when he is finished, ready to be read. Carrying the message should be between transmitter and receiver.

    Lluviadeabril Thanks for sharing your conversations.

    A simple hug.
     
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  3. Isabel Miranda de Robles

    Isabel Miranda de Robles Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    Me gusto tu verso perfecto que temino en un beso... a empezar una nueva libreta... Besos Sylvia, en el proximo cafe, que tal si llevamos nuestros respectivos cuadernos? Tambien los borrones se pueden compartir, que no?
     
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  4. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    Well, your comment easily outshines this poem. Thank you so much for stopping by these previously unread simple verses :)

    A hug.
     
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  5. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    Por supuesto que si Isabel,

    Los borrones son los mejores. ¿Café el Jueves?

    Me alegra que te haya gustado.

    Un abrazo de esos enormes. :):::hug:::
     
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  6. Ramiro Deladanza

    Ramiro Deladanza Un mensajero austral. Moderadores

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    Un poema impecable, inkless, sin borraduras,
    escritas en vistazos fijos, en acuerdo, un pacto incomparable.
    Cada verso, un toque, un aliento, una mirada fija.
    El final, un beso - deseo perpetuo devolver al cuaderno..
    De repente (pronto), una tormenta.
    La tinta corre intenso rojo.
    El final de un cuaderno, mi corazón sangrado seco.
    Agotada - sucumbo.

    no domino muy bien el english, pero usé un traductor... y que sorpresa me llevado con este impecable poema... muy buenos versos mi querida amiga

    It is a magnificent poem

    Austral kisses

    Ramiro
     
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  7. RA

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    Lluvia de Abril
    What a beautiful poem written without ink! Ink? What for? Perhaps wasn´t there enough the blood of your heart? You used all of it lovely. You sealed it with a kiss. Though your heart remained dry, though you say that you succumb, your words will stay alive in the notebook, perpetuated on the mind of those who have read your immortal poem.
    Congratulations,
    Fraternally,
    Ramiro Padilla
     
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  8. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    Ramiro,


    Tu traducción es impecable. Mejor traducción no puede tener. Gracias por leerme -un regalo siempre tu visita.

    A Magnificent Hug.
     
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  9. lluviadeabril

    lluviadeabril lluvia & rain

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    ¡Wow!

    What a nice comment -thank you. Your interpretation is very touching. I love it and adopt it as my own.

    A hug and great thanks.
     
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