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"Jest Reed"

Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by DEJAVU, Sep 28, 2024. Replies: 4 | Views: 413

  1. DEJAVU

    DEJAVU Poeta adicto al portal

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    "JEST REED"

    Reality is lived
    Spoken word is a different dimension
    A different direction
    As in our story
    Only valid in our mind

    Mass' perspective contradicts
    Appeal or validate
    Mandate or annulate
    Establish or circle around
    What really is True or False?

    Unless you accept it
     
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    DEJAVU, Sep 28, 2024
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    Cool stuff, deterministic and minimalist in style. Good read indeed.
    I was only surprised by one word choice you made, "annulate", which is generally associated with creatures such as earthworms. Did you mean "annul"?

    Have a good day.
     
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    Ermenegildo Tiraboschi, Oct 24, 2024
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    Thanks for stopping by Ermenegildo. In this write the verse "Mandate or annulate" is closely intertwined with the next "Establish or circle around". Mandate would refer to establish the same way annulate does to circle around. Your comment is also correct in mentioning earthworms as the word also refers to their circles/rings.
     
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    DEJAVU, Nov 4, 2024
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    Ermenegildo Tiraboschi Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    It was surprising to me because "annulate" it's not a verb in the English language. It's an adjective with a single meaning. But hey, this is all poetry, so flexibility rules. :)

    Have a great evening.
     
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    Ermenegildo Tiraboschi, Nov 4, 2024
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    Exactly sir. The flexibility native spoken slang provides. Speak it differently, then write it differently! :)

    Regards
     
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    DEJAVU, Nov 17, 2024

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