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Discussion in 'La Torre de Babel' started by god, Jun 11, 2008. Replies: 2 | Views: 802

  1. god

    god Poeta asiduo al portal

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    May 11th, 2008


    Touch my life from your heart,
    not ‘cause you feel blame of me,
    do it like you never did before,
    I’ll wait you to feel your pain on me.

    Pass your pain of unloved girl,
    I’ll take it from you as you never thought,
    now it’s mine, don’t worry, I’m strong for you
    and also the man always wants be.

    If this contact makes impossible,
    and we need to turn back,
    I pray to God that happens again,
    use your hands to cover myself.

    If I feel I’m losing hope about your hands
    more than everything in my life,
    should be worried but I wouldn’t
    nothing weak less what I feel for you.
    now, touch me.

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  2. RMBV

    RMBV Poeta recién llegado

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    Put More Feeling When You Are Writing. Take Your Time To Explain More The Actions. Your Vocabulary Is Extensive Thats Good. Order The Ideas And Then Put It In The Right Place

    With Respect: Rmbv
     
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  3. god

    god Poeta asiduo al portal

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    thanks friend, sometimes makes me harder to write in english, but is ok, my spanishi poems are good but this one is just the begining, i am trying to catch up on this things, i really need this, remember, i speak spanish with the exclusion i love english and like to talk it, and whatever, just need more practice, i guess, thanks for your opinion, really, saludos, yorker
     
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