The Secret

[center:cc12c6569f]Held in depths of some lagoon
awaits unseen, hidden, shadowed;
as a secret, of arcane date,
as bright as the sun,
as old as the moon.

A dafodill, finicky for light;
a blossoming song
that petals shall sing;
for immortality,
under water, under eyes.

It's a treasure
guarded by beast,
as witty as goblins,
as ferocious as a lion.
It's a secret,
that remains hidden.

Only one, that keeps useen.[/center:cc12c6569f]

 

It’s no secret that you posses a talent for writing. You have managed to form an array of colors and imagery key ingredients for a good poem. I always admire anyone who makes an effort to write in English even though it’s not their native language, congratulations. This poem is better written than the last one.

XOXOXOXOX

 

Danke Freund...
Thank you for your commentary...
And I always have mistakes, because I oscillate from a language to another (I know english, french and german, besides of spanish)... and it's very common to see me messing things up...
Auf Wiedersehen, merci encore...
Nicolai

 

Well in that case the more to congragulate you in your accomplishments...
I speek some enghish a bit of spanish and even smaller dose of french... :cry:

Pourquoi y a il tristesse dans vos yeux

xoxoxoxoxox

 

tristesse ? ? Je ne pense pas ainsi, it'd sois plutôt jeunesse.. :wink:

 

Non, c'est certainement tristesse que je perçois dans votre image. :shock:

 

il serait bon de savoir dans quelle image : le portrait du Zar ou l'autre ?

 

L'image avec vos soeurs. Elle m'a effectué tellement que je ne sais pas pourquoi. Peut-être c'était l'effet de couleur...

 

I't était parce que nous avons voulu regarder le modèle de cru, car ma soeur a conçu un collage des images de famille, et elle a voulu un comme cela...
Rien triste en particulier, ne s'inquiètent...
Au revoir,
Nicolai

 

Nicolai, I'd love to see you finish this one. I think you have a very intriguing idea here...
DRC

 

Dang! we need a miltilanguage chatroom here . I liked your poem Nicolai, like Guadalupe said...your talent is not a secret, but that singing dafodill is, and i've read some of your poems in spanish, i can assure you that your talents in writing poetry flyes over the hurdles, very, very good.

 

thankes jaguey and poet_poroeta... but let me tell u, the secret is far far away of being revealed...
auf widersehen,
nicolai

 

I must say that this is flawless,
one of the best reads i've had
in a while.
Un saludo,


DEJAVU