Redundant star

[nonickmario]

Gloom of passion and self

brightful, windy, ondulated hair

Clearness, avoidance of futility

wishes crown your eyebrows, give sense to the night



Lack of temperance redounds over your hip

Dreams about dreaming,

beauty seetles amidst a tiny hole in your cheek

vastness of looks.



I know such smile will last forever, and for good.

(II)

 

[Ciela]

Hola, amigo, mudaré tu trabajo al espacio correspondiente, dado que no está escrito en español. Gracias y un abrazo.

 

[RA]

Dear friend Nonickmario,
I liked your descriptive love poem. It is very beautiful. Please change the following words:
brightful to "brilliant" or to "with brightness"
ondulated to "undulated", and
seetles to "settles".
Fraternally,
Ramiro

 

[nonickmario]

muchas gracias Ramiro, haré los cambios. I'll do the changes, thanks!

 

[lluviadeabril]

Lines of admiration and a quiet stirring passion – a look and suddenly nothing lapses, everything lasts.
A hug hug.

 

[nonickmario]

Lines of admiration and a quiet stirring passion – a look and suddenly nothing lapses, everything lasts.
A hug hug.

Your answer it's a poem in itself