I have no suggestions

Guerrion · 12 de Enero de 2023

Poetry seems
to take a while to come,
but I'm in an isolated place,
whatever the case, the puzzle
keeps coming together piece
by piece knowing that this
might be our final
chance.

I heard noises
or words in the woods,
it’s all coming back now
a poem is nearby,
that’s right.

Oh sure,
my inspiration lives across town
and even somewhere out there in the world
and that can be of concern, sometimes,
but I have no suggestions.

Fidel Guerra. Jan 12, 2023.

Ermenegildo Tiraboschi · 17 de Enero de 2023

I enjoyed the whole concept of your muse showing up unannounced, and from some unpredictable place. Isn’t that always?

I have a couple of suggestions to try to make the whole thing a tad less unidiomatic:

“… that can be of concern”

“I have no suggestions”

“even somewhere out there in the world” (perhaps)

For the last one, the issue is on the use of the word “or” right before it, because if you remove “across town or even”, it should still reach the word “and” as a coherent segment in that stanza.

Cheers.

Guerrion dijo:
Poetry seems
to take a while to come,
but I'm in an isolated place,
whatever the case, the puzzle
keeps coming together piece
by piece knowing that this
might be our final
chance.

I heard noises
or words in the woods,
it’s all coming back now
a poem is nearby,
that’s right.

Oh sure,
my inspiration lives
across town or even the world
and that can be for concern, sometimes,
but I have not suggestions.

Fidel Guerra. Jan 12, 2023.

Guerrion · 17 de Enero de 2023

Ermenegildo, good morning to you.
I appreciate your review and agree with your suggestions/contributions.
I always try to do my best, but I’m a poetic layman, simple of thought.

Your friend from south of the Columbia River and the west side of the Rockies.

Fidel Guerra.

I have no suggestions

Guerrion

Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

Ermenegildo Tiraboschi

Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

Guerrion

Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa