Sweet Goddess

silveriddragon · 9 de Julio de 2019

A million of years flows in my mind
when I drink that potion of wisdom.
I've been living in many worlds of horror and light
and finally I realize I shouldn't criticize.

Only when I appreciated that moment
I could understand how infinitely valuable you were
Been dying in a world that repeats itself over and over again
and I just can see in the other side of the river with no name.

I tried to defy that creation
but I only can see the world through the looking glass
Into the boundary all the thoughts was fading out
but your sweet words saved me from myself.
I thought I was hallucinating
but it was only me, spellbound
with the darkness of the eclipse
and the blood red moon.

Then I had to do a choice
that was my own to make
A leap of faith
Could I survive
without you and the tender lies
Finding out finally my real life?

You make me your believer
of your divine personality,
intelligence and elegancy.
With no believer
This will seal the deal
Annul the liar within me
I bought the prophecy
"you and I will be happy indeed".

I tried to defy that creation
but I only can see the world through the looking glass
Into the boundary all the thoughts was fading out
but your sweet words saved me from myself.
I thought I was hallucinating
but it was only me, spellbound
with the darkness of the eclipse
and the blood red moon.

I won’t let you go
All this time my mind found an apparent pleasant parade
I just wish a bright future for you and me
even if we will never stay together
and I hope this was a valuable and true escape.

Ulpiano · 13 de Julio de 2019

silveriddragon dijo:
A million of years flows in my mind
when I drink that potion of wisdom.
I've been living in many worlds of horror and light
and finally I realize I shouldn't criticize.

Only when I appreciated that moment
I could understand how infinitely valuable you were
Been dying in a world that repeats itself over and over again
and I just can see in the other side of the river with no name.

I tried to defy that creation
but I only can see the world through the looking glass
Into the boundary all the thoughts was fading out
but your sweet words saved me from myself.
I thought I was hallucinating
but it was only me, spellbound
with the darkness of the eclipse
and the blood red moon.

Then I had to do a choice
that was my own to make
A leap of faith
Could I survive
without you and the tender lies
Finding out finally my real life?

You make me your believer
of your divine personality,
intelligence and elegancy.
With no believer
This will seal the deal
Annul the liar within me
I bought the prophecy
"you and I will be happy indeed".

I tried to defy that creation
but I only can see the world through the looking glass
Into the boundary all the thoughts was fading out
but your sweet words saved me from myself.
I thought I was hallucinating
but it was only me, spellbound
with the darkness of the eclipse
and the blood red moon.

I won’t let go
All this time my mind found an apparent pleasant parade
I just wish a bright future for you and me
even if we will never stay together
and I hope this was a valuable and true escape.

I like your poem appreciated poet and friend silveriddragon. I admire in your poem
witty metaphors and an amazing fantasy, a mixture of romanticism, nostalgia and
a slight gothic touch.

I don'tknow why you repeat the strophe that begins with the verse "I tried to challenge
that creation". Maybe it's because you want to emphasize the content of its verses.
It seems to me that in the verse "I will not let go" you wanted to write "I will not let you go",
because in this stanza you mean "she" implicitly, when you say "for you and me", "if we're ... "

I congratulate you for your brilliant imagination and I wish you success in your poetic work
in the English language.

Another big and fraternal hug,

Ulpiano

silveriddragon · 16 de Julio de 2019

Ulpiano dijo:
I like your poem appreciated poet and friend silveriddragon. I admire in your poem
witty metaphors and an amazing fantasy, a mixture of romanticism, nostalgia and
a slight gothic touch.

I don'tknow why you repeat the strophe that begins with the verse "I tried to challenge
that creation". Maybe it's because you want to emphasize the content of its verses.
It seems to me that in the verse "I will not let go" you wanted to write "I will not let you go",
because in this stanza you mean "she" implicitly, when you say "for you and me", "if we're ... "

I congratulate you for your brilliant imagination and I wish you success in your poetic work
in the English language.

Another big and fraternal hug,

Ulpiano

This is the very first time I try to do metaphors written in English. It's very difficult for me to do that, even in Spanish.

Into my fantasies there are always two characters fighting for stay together. But it isn't on the God's plan. That's give me inspiration about a gothic environment.

I repeat the strophe because of it is the axis of the poem. Three years ago when I started to write poems here in MundoPoesía I had many influences and I found many poems with this feature. Now I'm thinking to stop doing that

I'm studying English and sometimes I make mistakes like that. Yep, I want to say "I will not let you go". Main character don't want to let her go but he needs to do.

Thanks for the comment.
that gives me an incentive to keep experimenting.

A fraternal hug

Silveriddragon

Guadalupe Cisneros-Villa · 12 de Octubre de 2019

We all experience leaps of faith. Some times those steps turn out positive other times no so much.
I command you for venturing out and writing in a language that is not your own, you did a great job.

XOXO (X=hugs and O= kisses)

Sweet Goddess

silveriddragon

Poeta adicto al portal

Ulpiano

Obrero de la Poesía

silveriddragon

Poeta adicto al portal

Guadalupe Cisneros-Villa

Dallas, Texas y Monterrey NL México