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Discussion in 'Clásica no competitiva (sin premios)' started by goodlookingteenagevampire, Jun 11, 2022. Replies: 21 | Views: 1168

  1. goodlookingteenagevampire

    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    A tus lunas de sangre pertenezco.
    Al vuelo casi extinto de dragones.
    Al odio despiadado que dantesco
    apila cuerpos para los fogones.

    A quien te sobrevive compadezco
    siendo parte del rito que propones.
    Entre tus garras me rejuvenezco
    siendo más tuyo de lo que supones.

    Y vas dejando restos malolientes.
    Navíos que se secan en desiertos
    con quillas destrozadas por tus dientes,

    con muros fracturados en los puertos
    y con montañas óseas hirvientes
    en el terror de tus paisajes muertos.



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  2. Luciana Rubio

    Luciana Rubio Poeta veterano en el portal

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    A quien te sobrevive compadezco
    siendo parte del rito que propones.
    Entre tus garras me rejuvenezco
    Siendo más tuyo de lo que supones.
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    Tremendo soneto, dedicado a la guerra o a la muerte o tal vez a la vida que todo lo contiene. Tal vez a la Humanidad . Un gusto leerte.

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  3. Hotarubi

    Hotarubi Poeta recién llegado

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    Bien podría ir tú poema escrito en unas tablas de piedra.
    La crueldad humana, no tiene fín. Sea para cualquier escenario...aplicable a cualquier momento.

    Me ha gustado leerte, buen gusto musical.
     
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  4. Sasha.

    Sasha. Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    tremendo poema.
    saludos.
     
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    Es aquello que no nos gusta pero que dejamos que pase.
    Un beso, Luciana.
     
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    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    Muchas gracias, Hotarubi.
    Un saludo.
     
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    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    Muchas gracias, Sasha.
    Un abrazo.
     
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  8. dragon_ecu

    dragon_ecu Esporádico permanente

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    ¿Quién me invoca?
     
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  9. Luis Rubio

    Luis Rubio Moderador ENSEÑANTE/Asesor en Foro Poética Clásica Staff Member Moderadores Moderador enseñante

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    Fantásticas imágenes. Hay gente con ese poder. Soberbio soneto. Luis
     
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  10. goodlookingteenagevampire

    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    Byron Castillo.

    :):p:rolleyes:

    Un abrazo.
     
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    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    La verdad, no sé. Yo solo estaba alaraqueando.


    :rolleyes:

    Un abrazo, Gigio.
     
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  12. dragon_ecu

    dragon_ecu Esporádico permanente

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    Un saludo cordial de vuelta.

    Oscar Salazar (dragon_ecu).
     
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    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    Muchas gracias.
    Un abrazo, Oscar.
     
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  14. libelula

    libelula Moderadora del foro Nuestro espacio. Staff Member Moderadores

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    Solo te puedo decir, Sergio, que tu soneto me parece, extraordinario e impactante.
    En esto que le dices a Luciana; "Es aquello que no nos gusta pero que dejamos que pase". creo que encontré el corazón del poema, o no.
    Un beso, Sergio.
    Isabel
     
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    libelula, Jun 11, 2022
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    Igual prefiero no explicar para no arruinar la idea que cada uno se forma.
    Muchas gracias, Isabel.
    Un beso.
     
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  16. La Sexorcisto

    La Sexorcisto Lluna V. L.

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    Se siente esa "sangre" del poema. Besis.
     
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  17. César Guevar

    César Guevar Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    Pues sí... ¡Qué vaina!

    Y pensar que pudiera ser de otra manera.
     
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    dragon_ecu Esporádico permanente

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    Hotarubi, en realidad el poema no gira sobre la crueldad humana, sino en otras emociones más oscuras y antiguas.
     
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    angelcesar Poeta que considera el portal su segunda casa

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    Permisivos hasta que tocan el botón personal, no debería ser así.
    Muy bueno, Sergio!
    Fuerte abrazo.
     
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    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    Soy mandado a hacer para la sangre:rolleyes:
    Un beso, Lluna.
     
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    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    Sí, poh!
    Un abrazo, César.
     
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    goodlookingteenagevampire .

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    Muchas gracias, Ángel.
    Un abrazo.
     
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