I have no suggestions

Poetry seems
to take a while to come,
but I'm in an isolated place,
whatever the case, the puzzle
keeps coming together piece
by piece knowing that this
might be our final
chance.

I heard noises
or words in the woods,
it’s all coming back now
a poem is nearby,
that’s right.

Oh sure,
my inspiration lives across town
and even somewhere out there in the world
and that can be of concern, sometimes,
but I have no suggestions.

Fidel Guerra. Jan 12, 2023.​

 

I enjoyed the whole concept of your muse showing up unannounced, and from some unpredictable place. Isn’t that always?

I have a couple of suggestions to try to make the whole thing a tad less unidiomatic:

“… that can be of concern”

“I have no suggestions”

“even somewhere out there in the world” (perhaps)

For the last one, the issue is on the use of the word “or” right before it, because if you remove “across town or even”, it should still reach the word “and” as a coherent segment in that stanza.

Cheers.

 

Ermenegildo, good morning to you.
I appreciate your review and agree with your suggestions/contributions.
I always try to do my best, but I’m a poetic layman, simple of thought.

Your friend from south of the Columbia River and the west side of the Rockies.

Fidel Guerra.